After nearly a year i bring you chapter 2
You should re-read chapter 1 if you intend to read this:
https://tmmm.forumotion.com/t1036-pat-and-my-struggle-for-freedom#12070Unless you can remember everything from a year ago
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Chapter 2There was nothing but a vast emptiness. Being an Atheist, this is what should be expected, but what I didn't expect was the ability to experience the nothingness. It was much different then I thought, I had pictured the experience of being dead as being like what you experienced before you were born. But this was nothing like that.
I couldn't move or speak, it felt like an immeasurable amount of time had passed since I arrived in this void. During that time all I could think about was Sarah and how she was doing after I died, I wanted to believe she was able to be happy even without me. I often fantasized about how things could have been if I never had that feeling of dread. I wondered what had caused that feeling and why it effected me so much. At first I was angry, I was angry at myself for leaving Sarah like I had, angry at my cowardice for letting a stupid feeling get the better of me. So much time had passed that I had no choice but to forgive myself. Mostly I just missed Sarah.
As this time passed the space around me felt as though it was closing in, getting smaller and smaller. I was afraid, but there was nothing I could do to stop it from collapsing in on me and really, what was the point of existing in this state. I eventually just accepted that I was going to be crushed and was waiting for the space to consume me. I could feel the space getting tighter and tighter as it closed on me, I began to feel pain, something I hadn't felt in a long time, it was a dull pain but began to grow. As the pain grew colors started to flood the void, sounds and smells came soon after. I could feel a warm wetness on my arm and side.
“Hey, can you hear me, you're going to be ok.” a muffled voice said.
The colors began to take shape and I could see someone over me. It was the hotdog vendor, still in his full pig costume. He was moved aside by a lifeguard.
“Don't try to move, there's an ambulance on the way.” the lifeguard said.
Ignoring him I turned my head and raised my arm to see what the wetness was, it hurt to do so but it wasn't that bad. I could see blood running down my left arm and covering much of my shoulder. I looked around and saw that a large crowd was standing fairly far back from me. I could see Sam and Dave standing closer to me, Sam was crying a lot. The van that hit me was to my right, I couldn't see Sarah anywhere.
The ambulance arrived and a paramedic started to examine me.
"Can you tell me your name?" the paramedic questioned.
"Pat." I answered.
“Ok, Pat, does this hurt?” the paramedic asked as he felt my neck.
“No, where is Sarah?” I responded.
He didn't answer me, I began to worry, so I started to sit up.
“Stop, don't get up.” the paramedic said trying to stop me from getting up.
I pushed him back and stood up, my left shoulder hurt but other then that I felt fine. I walked toward the van looking for Sarah. Another ambulance had arrived and 2 paramedics were putting someone on a stretcher in front of the van.
“Sarah!” I yelled as I started running over to them.
I was stopped by another paramedic
“Don't... I'm sorry, we did what we could, but shes gone” the paramedic said.
I paused not knowing what to do. I noticed the driver of the van talking to a police officer outside of her mini-van, her face showed no emotion, she was just calmly talking to the officer.
“You bitch!” I yelled at her as I ran up to her, pushing the officer down.
I picked her up by the throat with both hands and held her off the ground choking her with all my strength. I didn't know what I was doing but her emotionless expression made me think she didn't care what she had just done and threw me into a rage. I've never done anything like that before, I'm not normally a violent person. I've never even been in a fight.
“Hey!” the officer I had pushed down yelled as he got up
Two other officers ran over to help him get me off the driver. The pain in my shoulder from holding her up like this became too great and I dropped the driver to the ground as the officers grabbed me.
“I'm sorry, I'm so sorry.” the driver said while coughing, she sounded sincere, but I was still angry.
“We are going to have to take you in.” one of the officers said.
They put me into the back of a patrol car, they didn't handcuff me. As I got in I looked over to Sam and Dave. Sam was still crying.
“We'll meet you there.” Dave said.
We drove to the station, on the way there I didn't want to think about what had just happened. I wanted this to be some kind of nightmare and that in reality Sarah was happy. To keep from thinking about it I started inspecting my left arm. I had a large bruise just below my elbow which didnt hurt unless I touched it. My shoulder looked fine even though it still hurt. The paramedics cleaned off the blood but my shirt had blood stains on it. I couldn't find any cuts or scrapes on my arm or anywhere on my side. I took my shirt off and put it on the seat next to me and looked out the window for the rest of the ride. I needed to avoid thinking about what just happened.
We arrived at the station, I had calmed down by the time we got there. They took me into an interrogation room. As we walked in the hotdog vendor was at the front desk talking to an officer there, he was still wearing the full pig costume.
“What's that guy doing here?” I asked while motioning towards the vendor.
“He's giving a statement about what happened this afternoon since he saw everything.” an officer responded.
I asked for a shirt as I sat down in the interrogation room. They made me wait in there for about a half hour before someone came in. I wondered how the hotdog vendor could have gotten here before I did. I didn't see him after he talked to me when I woke up from whatever that void was so he must have been asked to go to the station right after that.
I started thinking about that void. I guessed that was what a near death experience was like, but I wasn't near death. Maybe it doesn't matter, I thought I was going to die so my brain did everything it does before death. I've read that near death experiences are just the brain releasing chemicals and causing hallucinations, that must be what that void was.
The man that came into the interrogation room was wearing a suit, a blue tie, gray jacket and dress pants, and white shirt. The suit looked cheap except for the tie, it was of significantly higher quality then the rest of his suit. He handed me a white t-shirt that I put on.
“I'm Detective Crabshaw. I know this may be hard for you, but I need you to tell me what happened this afternoon.” he said.
May be hard for me? Of course its hard you jackass.
“I'd rather not, could we do this some other time?” I asked.
“I'm sorry, but we have to do this today.” he responded.
“Well I can't talk about it right now, I just want to go home.” I said.
“We have several witnesses that say you pulled your girlfriend into the street as the van came speeding through the red-” he said before I interrupted him.
“Hey! Are you trying to say I pulled her into the path of that van on purpose?!” I said in a loud voice as I stood up quickly.
“Did you?” he asked in a calm voice.
I wanted to pick up the chair I had been sitting in and beat him to death with it for accusing me of doing something like that, but I know that would only make this situation worse.
“No! And I can't believe you would accuse me of that, it was an accident.” I said as I sat down again.
“Then why did you grab her hand and run into the street like that?” Crabshaw asked.
“I didn't grab her hand, we were holding hands, and the light was red, we had the right of way to cross, the driver of the van should be in here, not me.” I responded.
“You didn't answer the question, why did you run into the street.” he said.
If I told him that I had a bad feeling I don't think he would believe me.
“The light was red, what does it matter if we ran or walked.” I said
“It matters because you ran into the path of an oncoming van while pulling her behind you and now shes dead.” he said forcefully.
I had pulled her in front of the van, that part was true. It was my fault... if I didn't do that she would be fine. The van would have just passed by through the red light and she would be safe. My eyes started to tear up.
“It was an accident, just an accident.” I said weakly.
Detective Crabshaw looked me over for a minute before sighing.
“I believe you.” he said. “But you did assault a women and an officer, so we are going to have to hold you.”
“For how long?” I asked.
“Well the women and officer aren't pressing charges so you aren't under arrest, we can only hold you for a few more hours.” he answered.
“If you believe me and I'm not under arrest why are you holding me at all?” I questioned.
“Well you did try to choke someone, the only reason you aren't under arrest is because you voluntarily let her go before the officers had to stop you, we just want to make sure you've calmed down” he responded.
Detective Crabshaw left the room and an officer came in to bring me to a cell. All the cells were identical, they had a toilet/sink and 1 small bed. The cell next to the one I was put in had someone laying down on the bed with his back to me. It smelt terrible, I was glad that I only had to spend a few hours here. A clock in the hall above a phone outside of the cell said that it was almost 3pm.
“Can I make a phone call?” I asked
They had taken my wallet, keys, and phone when I came in.
“Yeah.” an officer said.
He let me out and I called Sam, she said she and Dave were in the station and that they wouldn't tell them anything. I explained that I was being held for a while and asked if they would pick me up when I called again, she agreed. Her voice was quiet and shaky.
I sat down on the bed, it was more of a cot really, and looked over at the guy in the cell next to mine. He was still laying on his cot with his back to me, he had the blanket over him.
It was my fault...
We were the only 2 there, and I tried to focus my attention on him. I started to wonder what he was in here for, maybe he was a thief, going from town to town robbing banks and taking hostages. I could see him as the leader of a ragtag crew of bank robbers, all robbing banks for their own unique reasons. There was the guy that just wanted money for his family but got mixed up with the wrong people.
I pulled her into the street...
Then there's the computer expert that hacks into the bank's security system from his basement to help the others get in. He's in it just because he's looking for something to challenge his hacking skills.
If I wasn't there she wouldn't have died...
“Damn it.” I said as my eyes teared up again.
I couldn't avoid it anymore, Ill never see her again and it's my own fault. I started sobbing. I began to replay the events of that afternoon in my head, but my thoughts were interrupted.
“What's the matter?” the guy in the other cell asked without moving.
“Nothing” I responded, trying not to sound like I was crying
“You shouldn't blame yourself for Sarah's death.” he stated.
“What?” I asked surprised.
“You heard me.” he said.
“Who are you, what do you know about it?” I asked in a demanding voice.
He threw the blanket off over-dramatically, got up quickly and spun around to face me. It was the hotdog vendor, still dressed in his pig costume. This was the first time I got a good look at the costume. It was pink, had a curly tail and was pretty baggy on the guy, the shoes were small, like a pigs feet, they looked uncomfortable to wear. It had a giant pig head, he could see from the mouth of the head, the mouth had that black screen that you cant see into so I couldn't see his face. The eyes of the pig looked mean, like the head had an angry expression. The top had a bit of brown hair and the ears looked too small in proportion to the rest of the head. The hands looked like pink mittens that were attached to it.
“I'm the reason you had that feeling of dread.” he said smugly.
END OF CHAPTER 2--------------------------------------------
This time was mostly dialog, it feels shorter because of it but looks longer
Chapter 3 is almost done so it shouldnt take another year for the next chapter, maybe some time by the end of the week
I actually split chapter 2 up because it seemed to be getting long. So chapter 3 is really just the other half of chapter 2
The line i split it up at felt perfect to end a chapter on anyway so it worked out
Also the part where the main character goes between thinking about the guy in the other cell and his guilt went on much longer then i intended it to, i wanted to make it like when you want to avoid thinking about something but its always in the back of your mind never letting you forget about it
There was a mini story about bank robbers in there that just derailed everything until i cut most of it out, it still sorta derails it, but it was the minimum i could put to do what i was trying to do, even though i think i failed at what i was trying to do